Previous Word : Fire.
As she walked out of her office, she was greeted by a gust of wind! She took her ear phones out to hear windows rattling and dust sweeping across. She needed to cool off after a long, bad day! A drop of water fell on her cheek. She saw a cab slow down. Her place was ten minutes away. She decided to walk down today.
He didn’t like rains. But he had to be home on time today. He and his umbrella were walking down the road in search of transport. The strong winds shook the umbrella like a leaf. Once. Twice. Thrice. By then the umbrella was useless and he was already wet. Disgusted, he folded his umbrella and kept walking down the ankle deep water. A car passing by at full speed on the pothole riled road sprayed dirty, brown water over him! He hated the rains.
Her boyfriend was working late tonight. She was home alone. She loved water. Sitting by the open window, sipping her coffee she felt the water droplets sprinkle across her face. The rain kept picking up pace. A lightning streak lit up the sky. It was followed by a thunder as strong! She shuddered. Pulling the curtains across the window, she went into her room to get her book and ear plugs.
He shivered with cold. The wind was getting colder. His skin was getting hotter. The tattered blanket he had was barely helping. The lights from the portico of the hotel nearby were inviting. He started dragging himself towards the hotel. There were cars coming in. The guards shooed him away. They wouldn’t even let him sit on the marble floor. He sat on the footpath, shivering, rain now seeping through his matted, unkempt hair.
Graciously Yours!
Rain for different people and how you put it in words was quite amazing. Everybody we see have a story and we might not know it but our imagination and observation can sometimes component each other. Long story short, I seriously love how keenly you observe and pick stories and put it out with the help of your imagination. Thank you for sharing, aditi.
-Naima
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Waking up in the morning and reading this first thing? You gave me a smiling start! Thank you! 🙂 I try putting together pieces which go beyond the obvious. The undertones maybe dark and ominous, or bright and colourful, but with a perspective well thought. I’m so glad you liked it! Your feedback is so precious 🙂
Much love! ❤
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You did a great job defining all the scenarios Aditi 😍😍
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Thank you so much, Izza!! ❤
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“10 people, 10 perspectives” applies just right. Good short stories, Thanks!
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Thank you, Robin! Yes, that’s exactly what I wanted to portray. I’m so glad it reached you 🙂 Thanks for dropping by!
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A pleasure for me! You’re doing good, just keep it up:)
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Thank you so much! Sending across lots of love to you 🙂
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Welcome! Dear:)
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Amazingly done, i could relate with few of them myself. I should rather say expressions captured wonderfully!
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Thank you, Alok! I think I may be performing fairly well on the learning curve, right? 😉
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Oh, yes…
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this was wonderful! 😀
i have nominated you check it out here https://bedifferentbuddy.wordpress.com/2015/06/14/if-youre-a-quote-lover-3/
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Thank you so much, Akiraa! You should read the post on Fire also. I personally feel it impacts more.
By the way, I absolutely love your name! What does it mean?
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Yes I’ll read fire ASAP!
Thank you so much.. Akiraa means graceful strength! 😀
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Wow! Graceful strength! Your parents have a fantastic choice 🙂
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They are my parents! 😉
What’s your name?
Is it AdiC? Full name?!
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Aditi. 🙂
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Hey Aditi
Where do you stay?
I am also from India – western india!
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Calcutta.. Oh that’s great! Bombay?
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Nope! I am from Gujarat
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Okay 🙂
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It was a nice post and glad to talk to you..
Cheers!! :))
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Same here! Take care 🙂
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Well written and very moving as always 🙂
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Thank you so much, Ken! 😀
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Very beautifully captured! Lost in our worlds, we often overlook how things we love may impact others not as fortunate.
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Thank you! That is exactly what I wanted to convey. I’m so glad we connected 🙂
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Flawless writing!!! I would love to read on the word love from you!! 🙂
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Thank you!! Such an awesome comment ❤
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Wonderfully written. I could picture all of them in front of my eyes! 😀 Cheers!
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Thank you! I’m glad my writing and your imagination ended up giving you a good five minute read. Lovely to see you drop by 🙂
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It actually did give me an amazing five minutes read. 😀 I love your blog, you’re talented.
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Thank you! That’s very kind of you 🙂
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I guess I’m the odd one out compared to your other readers, but I felt this was trying too hard. I really liked the different perspectives on rains and the part of me that’s lived in a city that gets a lot of rains recognizes some nuggets you’ve written about.
From one writer to another, this lacked a clear thread of story-telling. You had brilliant character sketches but I didn’t see the story there. I’m not sure if that’s part of the writing activity you’re decidedly going for but most flash fiction I’ve read have a clear, short story that just pops out and I was left looking for more.
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Firstly, Ruchika, thank you for reading this and actually thinking about it so much that you came up with the comment. I appreciate the time you took out.
I’m doing a flash fiction series where I’m putting together one word-many moments. These aren’t four different stories. These are four different moments. Moments related to the same word. It’s unconventional, I know.
I hope now you see it the same way as we do. The regular flash fiction you’re talking about can be found in posts titled The Kill or The Smouldering Eyes or Pain.
Thank you once again for I love your feedback! I hope to see you around more often. 🙂
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Well yes, by this definition the posts make much more sense.
Perhaps we should write together? Pick a word and write on it? I used to do something similar earlier at Klash of The Konfessioners but sadly we’ve stopped scribbling now. 😦
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Yeah that would be great! And different. I’m already working on a few words. But really slow as you can see from my lack of blogposts! I have an exam coming up soon, so all the time goes there… We can discuss further on mail 🙂
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Thank you! 🙂
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Wonderful observations, AdiC! Every one has a story, but few of us bother to read those passing around us. Lovely…
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Thank you so much, Mother Hen! I can call you that, right?
I love people watching. Maybe that’s what stems the ideas into my stories…
Oh and welcome to the blog 😀
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Of course you may call me Mother Hen! 🐔🐣🐤🐥 And it is a pleasure to be here!
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Brilliant! 🙂
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Let me tell you that RAIN is a subject I’m in absolute love with. I appreciate the creative imagination you’ve put in here. Good work 🙂
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Thank you so much! 🙂 Flash fiction is alluring! Both to the reader and writer..
And welcome to the blog! 🙂
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🙂
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Sad.
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Ahh. A sad post? I’ll try 🙂
Thank you for taking the time out 🙂
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My deepest apology for not making myself clear? When I said sad? I meant the story. The man sitting outside in the rain was so sad?
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I’m so sorry! My bad! Actually, I’d requested my readers to leave a word they’d like me to write on in the flash fiction series next. I thought your word was sad.
As to what you were initially saying about the post, we always crib about the rains and getting wet or having to walk through water logged streets, but what about those who live on the streets? 😦
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Oh I see! Cool! Yeah, the homeless.:-(
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How do you manage to see and so beautifully show the same image through different eyes !
It was so so lovely and thoughtful ! The four emotions rain brings to different people could not be inked better than this. 😉
Absolutely loved the way you brought the power of perspective here.
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Thank you so much!
Observations and people watching. I think that helps me a great deal… 🙂
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Wow! How beautifully you’ve described the different situations of people on Earth. Commendable. 🙂
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Thank you so much! 🙂
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